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Anyway I decided that since others are doing snow stuff why not get into the swing of things too.
I like how this turned out. Quick note on panel 2....that is NOT vectored! I drew it on paper first before photoshop.....also it was really the only pose I could think of that made sense. The other stuff I drew in place of that sucked and never looked right. 
Now.....back to work on more comics I have waiting. I must create! Comments?
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I loved the premise of this one, truly funny. That being said, I have 2.5 major qualms:
-Those perfect_circle eyes. I don't mind them when the pony's eyes are supposed to be pointing at the viewer, but even if you want to draw your eyes as perfect circles, they will not appear that way when pointed in another direction and viewed from the side. As they are now, it makes it appear as if the pupil's and irises are permanently facing the 'camera', directly into my very soul. I don't like my soul being peered into (unless that's the point of the piece, which it isn't here).
-The 'action' in the first panel. Because you open the comic with Twilight already covered in snow and placed a snow covered tree behind her, it isn't exactly clear what has transpired immediately prior to this panel at first glance, even with the *smack* and Dash laughing. I had to think about it for a short second before it clicked and it is sort of a mental stumbling block.
-It is not exactly clear where the snow that falls on Dash is coming from, as there are no trees pictured reaching above Dash. Just a minor issue really though.
Aside from that, I really loved this one. TAKE THAT DASH, YOU DON'T MESS WITH NO MAGIC SUPER UNICORNS!
Ok but serious good points:
-The looks on Twilight's face
-The backgrounds and the way they frame the characters, well laid out and proportioned IMO.
Ok, seriously, I got nothin' else specific but I DID really like it.
Also, ronvarone makes a lot of good points along the same lines as me, but in much greater detail, I can agree with everything he/she/it said.
Now as a comic, it leaves wanting. A lot is implied,
Panel1: We see Twilight AFTER she's hit with a snowball, with a little 'smack' in asterisk. OK great, Something happened and we missed it. This could have been better in two panels. One of Twilight simply walking (setting the scene) then in the next panel is the money shot.
Panel2: Love it, I read your description about drawing it out on paper or something. Great method. Layering is always good and gives you a sense of where you're going.
Panel3: Twilight's doing magic. Self explanatory, she has that devious smirk. I'm not sure how else this could have gone but I'm OK with this one to a point.
Panel4: Show us what is going on. I would have loved to see a "Tidal wave" of snow. (I say snow because I already know whats going on.) If you didn't want to show that. At least put a looming shadow there. Otherwise this panel doesn't do anything.
Panel5: Sweet irony. A lot is happening off stage again. This is where you could have broken up your single pony panel and put both of them in and give Twilight the glorious "in your face" face.
So this is good. It's a classic joke with magic and ponies. I approve. Spend more time in the planning phase and really see how far you can push things. I look forward to more.
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