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Had a lot of fun with this one. That Fluttershy training montage BG music goes well with this.
The background was decent....just getting sick of ponyville BGs lately. YES I make my BGs. Indoor stuff is what I do best. 
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I love the way you drew them, but the heads are a bit to tall to be accurate to the show.
One thing that I would suggest (and this is just me) is that you make the eyelashes just a little bit curlier... They look a little to straight.
Other than that, I wish you like to your art making hobby and hope that you can continue to create good pieces like this. Good luck!
And received the shield.
To guard over me
In the thick of the
Forest EverFree.
I lay there that day
And, oh, did I pray
That there was someway
To reach the green field
To discard my shield.
You ask me my fate?
There's no end to sate
You, for I died there
In EverFree fair.
This comic looks really well polished. It's clear a lot of effort was put into it, and the emulation of the show's style is both clear and well executed. Technique, as always, receives a 5/5.
However, a pony of your caliber requires a different level of critique, and compared with similar works this one fails, in my opinion, to live up to the comedic standards.
This joke is very old. It has a timeless charm to it, but its use for comedic purposes has been long put to rest. Perhaps if you had made this comic earlier, then it may have been received better.
Needless to say, this dinged you a bit in the originality category. The impact was lessened as well, as one can pretty much tell what's going to happen once Scootaloo showed up with sunglasses. It was, to say the least, predictable. Not that it's a bad thing, but considering your level of ability, this is a major flaw in your comedic sense. You cannot simply fall back on tried and true jokes and expect the same reception as it received the first time you used it.
I dinged you on your vision as well. Being such a renowned and prolific artist, this comic seems like the bar had been set lower, both for it as a comedic piece and for you as a comic artist. This is mostly due to the joke you used, and how often it has been used by others as well as yourself. You must strive higher if you wish to become better. How, I do not know, nor will I ever know. I can only offer suggestions.
All of this is my opinion, nothing more. Take it as you will. Some ponies may find this comic to be fantastic, as always. However, I wish to see you improve, and perhaps this, in my opinion, fair but harsh critique may set the path for that advancement.
Cheers, and good luck to you in your future endeavors.
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