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First Day of Training

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Featured on Equestria Daily #29 [link]


AH.....refreshing isn't it. I'm back to normal MLP pics...with style! :P This was a fun little pic I thought of about 3 pics ago but I needed a little bit to decide how I wanted this to look. Originally this was just gonna be Rainbow Dash in the wonderbolts uniform but then I thought.....that's stupid. :iconrainbowdashderpplz: That's been done too much. Why not take it a step further and imagine if this was the first day of training if she made the Wonderbolts team. "Then this here appeared!" :P


So yeah...oh wait this would be the section where I've tell you how I got the idea for the pic....hmmmmmm. Ok next section then. Well this pic was a lot of fun to do. It was fun to do Soarin again cause I felt like I didn't do him as best as I could in the collab *Veggie55 and I did. :( BUT now he looks 5x better. Spitifre was new to me. Got a little tricky on the paper sketch with her hair but I got past that quickly. :D Rainbow Dash.....need I say more?


Overall though I'm fairly pleased with the way this came out. The WAY far part of the background is a little bland which is a shocker for me cause I usually fill that up but not this time for whatever dumb reason was floating in my head. Left tree is a tad off and other small stuff. :iconapplejackderpplz:


Anyway it was just nice to do a normal MLP pic again. AND It didn't take as long as I thought to get back into my comfort zone. Banged this pic out in 2 days! :DWIN! Hope you guys like it....onto the next one! Comments?


Time spent: 10 hours over 2 days
Program: Paper + Photoshop CS5


PLEASE don't COPY, trace, or recolor any of this WITHOUT asking me. Remember to link this back to me if you put this on a site or something.



Rainbow Dash, Soarin, Spitfire © Lauren Faust
Art © Me
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
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A very nice bit of work. Anything I have to say is going to be nitpicky. But since you asked...

The good stuff! You have a great selection of colors. The choices you made look very much like what would be in any "official" comic-book-style material that Hasbro would put out.

The characters are certainly on-model. No complaints at all on the style. Even if RD's and SF's manes and tails were plain white there would be no question who they were. You know your ponies.

The mini-story you're telling is loud and clear. Even without the title, people would know exactly what was going on, who the characters are, what they are doing and what comes next. In a single panel comic that's very hard to do, and you've nailed it.

And now, the promised nitpicks.

I have some concern about the lifted forelegs; if you straighten them out they would be longer than the near-to-the-viewer forelegs. Similarly, Soarin's forelegs, if straightened, would be a fair bit longer than his hindlegs. A soak in hot water until they shrink may be in order.

On RD's costume, the far-side lightning-stripe at the hind leg ankle shouldn't line up with the near-side stripe. It should be a little above, like it is on Spitfire.

I'm assuming the blue strip behind RD and SF is a stream. It's a little too perfectly-straight to be a natural stream; you may want to make it more random-curvy.

The text in the word balloons crowds the borders. A little more whitespace would do well. Also, because people tend to read as much left-to-right as up-to-down, RD's dialog appears to come first. I would shift SF's word-balloon up and to the left until it was at least partially above RD's dialog. This also has the benefit of getting it out of the way from between SF and Soarin', which would help visually define SF and Soarin' together (the senior members).

The fact that the above are all I can come up with speaks to the strength of the piece. Well done!